A poem of mine was published on Tuesday at www.lifeasahuman.com, where you can also find copies of Destiny's Implacability, Vicariously...Failing? and as of Monday 15th July, Emperor of the Mundane. They're edited in accordance with word restrictions and editing strictures and a whole host of details we writers seemed to be struggling against the tides of. Writing is in itself a volatile, tricky business. Your poem, article, novel is as a boat. When we believe ourselves finished, we might see it as something similar to the Titanic - the zenith of creation, the most exemplary form of boat we might ever have created. Why? Well, we're proud, and excited, and a little overwhelmed, and almost always not ready to plunge into the waters of criticism and reviewing. We've invested all this time, we deserve to hold a little confidence in both the creation and ourselves, don't we? Our boats, it turns out, have holes in, be these small grammatical holes, errors of style, voice, unhinged plot, absolutely anything. And as with any hole in any boat, you're bound to suffer for it!
As such, I am going to deconstruct this poem on Fractured Paths next week, possibly Thursday again. Some of what I thought about, some of what I intended, some of what I simply had to work and work against while the currents plunged and deluged around me, as I struggled to fix these egregious errors.
I leave you now with the poem and a farewell until tomorrow to those of you still standing.
Fallen
Stilts
These
waves dart, back and forth,
the
sand rises, disperses, riddled
with
pervasive salts.
Four
robust stilts halt
this
inexorable tide, while
I
wait, suspended,
locked
in this gaol for eternity,
now
slow is the back and forth
rock,
and stone and silt,
they
are whispering to me,
imploring
me to return, taunting
me
because I can’t.
Left
more to my thoughts now,
invaded
by the slaughtering juggernauts:
Anger
and Jealousy, they feed their
vigour
through my absences, as I
shuffle
on this swaying beech,
infected
with rot and decay.
I
am drawn to the edge, to
stare
down and see only the stretching
wooden
dais, underpinning my shack of
abandonment.
The grey pebbles
beyond
are forsaken, lost in the
cacophony
of losses.
Shards
of regret pierce me,
biting,
ever more acerbic,
circling
my thoughts once more
to
the irony: four wooden stilts and
the
rocker, and I, trapped
in this
impassable no man’s land.
Ineffable
is the void, halted are
my
pleasures; I am left with
one
comrade: Grief. Grief for my own
splintered
stumps.
S.C.
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